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Approved tiny beetle7166 Aplication [Approved - Mallsharkz]
Started by _squ0nk_

OOC

Minecraft Username: tiny beetle7166

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): yes https://avalore.net/rules

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: i googled minecraft roplay server.

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username:

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): not much to say about me, im just happy to find a active community ^^ (English is not my first language, i deeply apologise for any spelling mistakes in this form) 
(edit' 1: omg this is so embarrassing i fully didnt know i could click the ko'ran thing and the regions and clans would pop up lol) 

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)? (250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)

*she looks at the kind older woman, fully ready to say she does not want to talk. But once she sees her kind warm eyes, she sighs and speaks*
“I came because.. Well im not sure, There is not much to it really..”
*she speaks as he looks down to her own hands, but upon realizing the older woman was still paying attention, she takes a deep breath and speaks again*
“Although i do not wish to bore  you ,i am from *Sharuul, more specifically the far regions of Aisin . I love the peace and quiet, and yet.. I was bored,  I never really felt “in the right place”.” 
*she says as she looks up, and lens back against the wagon, like she understands she had no hopes for a quiet trip* 
“Its quite cliche really” *she mumbles more to herself*

“ my family follows old traditions, so when i came of age i did a pilgrimage into the mountains. The entire time i though, once i reached the summit, everything would make sense, i would feel like i belonged. i thought those bad feelings would vanish. But they stayed. And i enjoyed the climb more than the view in the end.”
*she then falls silent, hoping the older woman would take that as enough of a answer, but as she kept staring at roxana, she returned to speak*
“Once i returned my brothers and sisters praised me, talking about "how light and free i must be feeling". but i didnt feel like that at all. i am the only half race in the family, perhaps that is why i don't feel like i belong. My family is quite.. Strict with traditions”
*she does not seem like she wishes to elaborate more*
“so after i returned, and the same gloom fell upon me, my eldest brother took me aside for a talk. I opened my heart to him, spoke of the summit. Of how i dont really think my life was amounting to anything. How much i wondered if there was more for me somewhere else. I hoped he would encourage me, perhaps share my insecurities, but instead he called me a “faithless fool”. So i left, not because he offended me, but because he is right. My brothers and sisters have done so much and yet, I do fear my soul is weak, i fear my faith has never been truthful. i fear i am not blessed by the feys but cursed. but then again, i might just be overthinking.”
*roxana says, slowly, like she is not used to speaking much. Her eyes look tired*
“So i suppose i am a bit lost.  I am curious about the Violet River, i want to see *the The Spire*. But mostly Aedall, i heard so much about it from old tomes and tales. And yet i have never meet someone who visited what it once was. I am going to the Southern Reach. I will see the monument. And then.. Well who knows, if i like it, i might stay for a while more. I dont really have much of a plan. i never really do"

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Character Name: Roxana

Character Race:  half race (Arsa Sidhe +Fey-Touched)

Character Age: 41

 Brief Physical Description:  5’7, pale blond with golden eyes (Fey-Touched solid colored eyes, not sure if it shows in the skin) 

Image of Skin and Figura Model: 

 

https://www.minecraftskins.com/uploads/skins/2025/11/30/roxana-with-braids-23682861.png?v938 (i cant copy and paste the image, i dont know how lol, also if i do see the clothes in the server lean to a more medieval vibe,  i intend on changing them, the clothes not like the main features) 

 

Hi there! My name is Delta (or Mallsharkz) and I'll be handling your application.

You're on the right track so far, and your skin looks good to me! However I do ask that you make a few changes to your response to the prompt;

- While you do meet the word count, I think your response could benefit from some narration that breaks up the dialogue. Try describing what your character is doing while they talk! 

- I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'the summit', and your reference to Ko'ram in general could be expanded upon a bit. I'd suggest specifying which province of Ko'ram that Roxana comes from exactly.

- A few capitalization errors are in here as well, but otherwise the grammar looks generally alright.

Once you make these changes leave a reply !

andromeda | the corvid


 

i did some changes, let me know what you think! also i missed a whole like, compendium about the ko'ran, so i didnt see the regions and clans stuff, so sorry for being so brief in the first submission! 

hey did i reply correctly ? 

 

The additions look good! I would like one small clarification though. You mentioned "there are many valks there," and I am wondering where exactly you were pulling this information from. 

andromeda | the corvid


 

Oops, you are right, english is not my first language, i think when i read
“ The Spire is a large structure that towers into the sky near the southern tip of the
Southern Reach. Its origins and purpose are seemingly a mystery, as its existence was not known until after the disappearance of the Aedall. This mystery drew in people of all trades and backgrounds, and around the year 1600, an eponymous town sprung up around the Spire itself. In time, with smithies, seamstresses, apothecaries, and even occult shops, the Spire-town has become a bustling melting pot of cultures and ideas.”
(the first part of “the spire” compendium) and then read

“Valks, confirmed when hearing the bells of ships arriving in the harbour. These people, who also call themselves the Valkians and Valkyians form the dominant peoples of the eastern continent, dominating the way from their home in the Midlands up into the north and down to The Wall, a monument of their creation to keep the 'troublesome' Aedall at bay”
I assumed valks were bussing in the spire, like since they are merchants  i assumed they would probably go to a developing place like the reach, since it sems like there are tons of different people there, im sorry for my mistake! I will take that part out, im so sorry!  

~+ Welcome! +~

Sorry for the delay, I was caught up in some work IRL. Your whitelist application has been approved! The server runs on Minecraft 1.20.4, and you can connect with server address; mc.avalore.net.
I highly recommend taking a look at this guide here regarding installation of the Avalore modpack! Though it is not required, it can help enhance your experience on the server. 

You can learn about the server's mechanics here, or view various other helpful guides here to help get acquainted to the various commands and plugins. Feel free to also take a look at the Character Profiles and even post your own if you would like!

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andromeda | the corvid